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fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
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land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2005-04-30 12:53 PM



i'll miss you always
or at least awhile
i'll cry for you every night
until the tears come no more
i'll love you
even if you don't feel the same
i need you right now
but i'm glad you're okay


bergundy


At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

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1 posted 2005-04-30 12:56 PM


I understand this
I don't know what I would title this one though..but sure do understand it...

fearing-laughter
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2 posted 2005-04-30 01:17 PM


thank you so much for replying SEA, it kinda sucks that you do understand it, or that basically everyone does...The title isn't meant in the literal sense, but the person who this poem is about.  We were mocking songs with stupid titles, and i was like "well it is really hard to title, all of mine suck in my writing." and he said "I'd help you title things if you ever let me read your poetry." so there is the title...kind of like my poem is nice, but the title expresses some inner sarcasm or resentment.  once again,thanks for replying. i probably shouldn't reply so much to my own post, but ah well lol.

bergundy


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3 posted 2005-04-30 02:17 PM


ahhha got it...that makes sense....it's ok if you reply to your own poem, don't sweat that...LOL  
CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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4 posted 2005-05-02 10:15 PM


First off..."whatever yanks your pleasure chain" is perhaps the greatest line i have ever heard...Secondly, loved the poem, almost wish it had continued. And third, you can definitely reply to your own post. and if you cant, then i've broken alot of rules..
Love!
Keryn

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
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Texas.. and yes i have an accent
5 posted 2005-05-11 01:56 AM


wow i am going through whats in all of ur poems right now!
electricxheart
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far away from home.
6 posted 2005-05-11 03:35 PM



Wow.

I'm going through exactly this now.
Awsomeeee.

-Kelly

Cloud 9
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7 posted 2005-05-11 04:12 PM


Maybe a title like..."until then..." or "while your gone.." or "after your gone..."
This is excellent.

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