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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2005-04-19 04:43 PM



choking, riding neck in
neck next
to a hoe talking on
her diamond encrusted
cell phone;
have you heard death
call you before?
it sounds slippery
and
deceased,
its words increased
by the murmur of static
hiding
beyond the white fence.
so, close your
eyes and take a deep
breath,
don’t forget to
seduce the modest melodies;
turn off the radio,
turn off,
turn.
the next right is to your
left;
he kisses with open
eyes
and a love suicide,
so don’t believe his heart
when he
turns to say goodbye.
be dizzy today,
pretend you never knew
what all of
this had meant in the first
place.
you love to be loved
and when the
tree hits the windshield
and he stands
next to your angel
smiling,
i think you'll finally
know how
your veins seep
with
revenge,
a bloodshed regret that
will never mend.

© Copyright 2005 Kelly Landis - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2005-04-19 05:28 PM


very graphic and emotional.
I felt all of it

dodge_chick2003
Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136
California
2 posted 2005-04-19 10:39 PM


The beginning seemed to confuse me, I didnt think the beginning made sense but the rest flowed well. I like it.
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