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aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia

0 posted 2005-04-16 06:45 AM



hey there everyone im back... had some serious writers block and needed to work thru some stuff before the block was cleared... this isnt my best work.. let me know wat you think anyway
Ruth

'i told you so'

you've come back again
im just wondering
how long is it
going to be this time

my heart is
still bleeding for you
my mind still
lingers in my memories of us

my body still
remembers your touch
wishing,
hoping,
dreaming
for it once again

dont make me cry
over you once more
dont make me scream
because i heard
'i told you so' over again

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

© Copyright 2005 Ruth - All Rights Reserved
PoeTik JusTice
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since 2003-01-05
Posts 186
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1 posted 2005-04-19 07:53 AM


Well, I can definitely feel your pain in this poem! Good job.

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

Poems of Autumn
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since 2005-04-18
Posts 11
highschool
2 posted 2005-04-20 11:59 AM


Interesting. I liked the feeling you put in the poem. It seemed like you made me feel exactly what you were feeling. I try to do that every time I write, but to me it just doesn't come out. But maybe since I'm new here, I can get some ideas from all the great poets here.  


Jezzika
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since 2005-01-05
Posts 154
work
3 posted 2005-04-21 10:39 AM


"dont make me cry
over you once more
dont make me scream
because i heard
'i told you so' over again"

Wow, there was so much emotion in this.  I really liked it.  

Jezzika

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
4 posted 2005-04-21 08:21 PM


thanks everyone for replying this isnt my best work but you have to start somewhere after writers block...
thanks again your all legends
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

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