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tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
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Texas.. and yes i have an accent

0 posted 2005-04-11 10:36 PM



I carefully plant kisses on your cheek
like God placing the constilations in the sky.

I trace my finger around your lips
like a child trying to color inside the lines.

I gaze into your deep eyes
like Snow White staring into the magic mirror.

I nibble your ear
like a rabbit eats the grass.

I feel your arms around me, holding me so tight
like it used to be.

hmmm.... just felt like working on somethin kinda diff but it ended up like everything else... i tried... first thing i saw were the stars in the sky... lol w/e i give up for the night...

-hold on to the one you love

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fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
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land of cheese (Wisconsin)
1 posted 2005-04-11 11:33 PM


*nods, kinda corny, but hey...very interesting (i don't mean interesting in the condescending bad way either) definetely some strange imagery associated with love, the rabbit thing was trippy. good stuff.

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

youcan'tseeme
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 88

2 posted 2005-05-19 11:00 PM


good imagery

i like the description

it was cute and somewhat enchanting

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