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Teen Poetry #7

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pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2006-06-08 08:40 PM

I’m so confused
Don’t know what to do
They say there’s other guys
But I want you
You have no idea
How I feel
When I see you with her
What I feel
Is unbelievable
Completely real
The Misery
The Pain
No Confidence
No Gain
You’re my reason for living
The life that I’m living
I’ve never felt this way before
You’re my first thought in the morning
The last before I sleep
The reason I’m Happy
And the reason I weep
Because of this secret
That I keep

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-06-09 12:39 PM

BEAUTIFL.. i loved this.. I had to take my time reading it to make sure I understood it and got everything but this was amazing.. I think I like it so much because I can really relate to this.. goin in my library.. goodjob.

~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2006-06-09 01:14 AM

that is really good, amazing. it is totally something that alot of people can relate to, and i kinda can to. that is deep

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-06-09 01:23 AM

So far this would have to be one of my favorites by you, not that I’ve read all of your poems yet, just this is one I can relate so well too… yeah, everyone else said the same thing, but it’s true.

If I had to choose my favorite part would have to be,

“ You’re my reason for living
The life that I’m living”

Those two lines say it all, lots of things I’ve gone through could be explained with those lines… Excellent write, I found that it was such a pleasure to read.

I look forward to seeing more from you in the near future

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