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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
... side by side ... ... line by line ... ... you sit in production ... ... marionettes of your own enjoyment ... ... strings have no feeling ... ... puppets have no heart ... ... the only puppet with feeling ... ... strung up by my heart ... ... positive to negative ... ... black to white ... ... male to ... ... i hang here in wait ... ... strings start to hurt after awhile... ... ... you're all the same ... ------------- This one's abit more straightforward. The deeper we go, the harder it gets. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I like it. its not overly creative. but I like it. |
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drummerboy678 Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 134 |
I actually really like this... I think the format takes away from it a little, and is kind of unnessary, but the message is strong enough to come across either way. I love this line: ... strings have no feeling ... ... puppets have no heart ... Good job, I enjoyed this one. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Nothing profound to say at the moment, lol. So i think I'll just say I like it, and leave it at that, k? 'till next time. -Rich "I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless" |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Didn't feel like being too crafty with this one. Thought I'd cut right to the point on this little number. |
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