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drummerboy678
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 134


0 posted 2005-04-01 02:31 AM


maybe its true,
in a really sad way,
that,
like a flower,
we can never
flourish, never
reach our full
potential
until we’re in
the ground.


Cynical as **** , I know... Havn't been here in a while though, and thought I'd post a short one.
Comments and criticisms are welcome.

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Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2005-04-01 10:18 AM


being cynical is sort of part of being a poet.
I like it a lot actually.
it's hard to make a point with so few words.
you did this very well.
well done, sir!
welcome back and keep posting!

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
2 posted 2005-04-01 04:42 PM


I've not seen better examples of what is
possible with concicse writing than this.  
Cynical it may be, but quite possibly true none
the less.  Well done!  Now I shall depart,
awaiting the harsh, but not overly so, reviews
my poems will inevitably garner from you, master
of words.

"I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless"

electricxheart
Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.
3 posted 2005-04-01 07:35 PM



I admire people that are able to write short poems that actually sound good and make sense since I have such trouble doing that. I applause you for this, can't wait to read some of your other work.

-Kelly

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

dodge_chick2003
Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136
California
4 posted 2005-04-02 08:04 AM


Although I dont really understand this poem, I can tell that you really feel for it and I admire it. If more poets wrote what they feel we would have better poems out there. Good Job on expressing your feelings. Most people can not do that!!!!!
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