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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2005-02-04 05:47 PM



centered down hard on the facts,
we did our dance.
oh, we did our dance.
skipping the beats, we formed
an argument,
blessed with breaths too
fragile to bear.

disintegrating to become
small enough
to sleep in your heart,
i tried to make sure you
wouldn’t forget me.
but, intentions wore down,
chipping with the clouds.
and i became only someone
in your still-life
picture frame.

catastrophe stands for the
initials
of your name that i’ve torn
down from this
heart on my sleeve.
and, so far away from home.
i tried breathing and
landed on something that
graced the edges of my skin.
our sin, our sin.

and oh, we danced
that night,
alright. in separate directions
we floated away,
you with a comforting hand
and me with a
bomb in my heart.

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

© Copyright 2005 Kelly Landis - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2005-02-04 06:56 PM


I love how you write.

disintegrating to become
small enough
to sleep in your heart

I like what this could imply...that you are unconscious thus less regarded by him perhaps you didn't mean it that way, but its awesome none the less.

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2005-02-04 08:58 PM


Amazing write Kelly...you've got real talent.

~Alli~

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Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
Posts 326
Wandering
3 posted 2005-02-05 10:48 AM


You have just added to my all-time PIP favorites, thank you so much for sharing. This is wonderful (although dark) and is going into my library.

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fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
4 posted 2005-02-08 09:37 PM


i tried breathing and
landed on something that
graced the edges of my skin.
our sin, our sin.


awesome lines, plus the ending was great. as usual, good poem =).

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

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