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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2005-02-02 10:47 AM

Lost long ago,
When there was nothing,
Except the pain.
My thoughts are my sins.
Even when I tried to cage them,
My mind would still let them run free.
Free to torture and plague me,
From morning to night.

Whirling in the dream,
You turn your head to look at me,
The sadness in your eyes,
Is almost too much.
Please don’t look at me like that.
Your eyes are too beautiful to have tears.
Everything about you…is beautiful…
And I’m sorry.

Alive, but not awake,
My reserves are exhausted.
Too much stress,
I just want to hold you,
And make everything….go away.
But life is life,
And time seems frozen,
‘Cuz you’re not here,
And I lay here trapped,
Just trying to deal.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

1 posted 2005-02-02 03:22 PM

All your words always leave me with
a lasting impression on the emotions
you're going through.

I loved this.

-Kelly

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2005-02-02 08:35 PM

Thanks, I'm glad you liked this.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2005-02-04 07:19 PM

hmmm.
I feel you.
this hit me square in the heart

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

4 posted 2005-02-05 10:40 AM

I especially like the line that says " My thoughts are my sins " because it's true.
The whole poem was great though. You always
write great poems.

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

5 posted 2005-02-05 10:43 AM

I loved everything about this, especially the middle stanza. You are very good at sharing not only words, but feelings. Keep it up.

www.livejournal.com/users/alimakins

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

6 posted 2005-02-07 08:35 PM

Thanks again everyone.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

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