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HopelessRomanticGuy
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0 posted 2005-01-26 12:43 PM



Their eyes locked
The moment they met
And they just knew
That they’d never forget

Trading friendly words
Turned in to something more
Leading them to realize
It’s each other they are for

Yet still they carried on
Afraid to drop the protective pretense:
For until that fateful day
None had felt emotion as intense

But fate always has it’s way
And brought them close together;
The boy finally gave in,
Knowing it was now or never

He waited an hour’s eternity
For her emotional reply
The words she used he’ll always remember
Unto and beyond the day he’ll die

And thus they were joined;
Two soul’s becoming one
And their love indeed
Was rivaled by none

Together they stood through trials strong
Ever vigilant and growing confident
Believingthere was nothing love could not overcome
Ignoring the silent invasion of arrogance

Eighteen months together they lived;
A lifetime of love they shared
Yet in his bliss he was unaware
That in her heard she’s running scared

Growing tensions came to head
On another fateful night
Words of anger harshly said
revealed true extent of their plight

On and off for two more days
Their solemn war did rage
Taking blame and promising to change his ways
Did nothing to halt life’s turning page

The truth he just could not forgive,
That the ultimate betrayal she did commit
That moment he’ll forever relive
When she told him their love was forfeit

And so they moved on
More distant than before
And he’s barely holding on
Battered by pain he tries to ignore

She’s moved on now too
Greeting life with a fading smile on her face
Pushing aside all she’s been through
Secretly remembering their fall from grace

One is now two
Their lives torn apart
And there’s nothing left to do
In these matters of the heart

"I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless"

© Copyright 2005 Richard H. Dikeman - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-01-26 06:59 PM


Wow Rich.  Amazing write...I'm just speechless. *thinks* I can't really explain what I'm thinking. Like the poem was really awesome although it was kinda sad and all...lol. And I liked the title, it really fit. Anyways, enjoyed this write.

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

tapper798
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2 posted 2005-01-26 10:49 PM


Dang Rich!! I'm absolutly speechless...it flowed extremely well, the rhyming was amazing and the story...so very sad yet so typical sometimes.  I guess there's always that one little doubt or thought that leads to a break in the once-so-solid life we held.  I hope you don't mind if I keep this, you did an amazing job.

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One day u'll ask which is more important,u or my life. I'll answer my life and u'll walk away never knowing u are my life.

WinterWren
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3 posted 2005-01-27 09:31 PM


This described the story very well. The ryhming scheme was really good. The second to last stanza was probably my favorite.
This is going in my library.
Wounds of the heart are always the hardest to heal, I hope your doing okay.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

peachesNcream
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4 posted 2005-01-28 11:07 PM


Each line made me want to read the next. Good job! ~Jess

"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return" -Moulin Rouge

Lexy
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5 posted 2005-01-29 01:04 AM


hmmm. its very well written, nicely composed. The rhyme is good, usually rhyme bugs the crap out of me but this was good.
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