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Teen Poetry #7

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OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

0 posted 2005-01-22 08:51 PM

so its been about a year. and a lot of you are still here. crazy. i'm back.

Jump up and down and spin around.
Sink and fall and trip and drown.
Don't forget to hit the ground.
Fly, glide, and swim and don't explain.
Hide and seek and search and find
Remember how it felt to slide
and swing and climb and run and fly
and twist and shout and scream and lie.
fresh cut grass, legs in the air
dancing barefoot in the sand.
freefall.

[This message has been edited by OtherSideOfTheMirror (01-23-2005 11:55 PM).]

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2005-01-22 10:53 PM

I REMEMBER YOU...

I always loved your writing
welcome back!
I like the part about the grass.
take care.
-Lexy

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

2 posted 2005-01-24 03:08 PM

I really liked this. The fourth and ninth stanzas didn't have the same flow, and made it more difficult to read. The images and the mood are great, though. Thanks for sharing.

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

3 posted 2005-01-24 09:11 PM

I really love your childish poems
"Jump up and down and spin around.
Sink and fall and trip and drown."

laura

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