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young_blood
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0 posted 2005-01-18 11:25 AM


I just added this song to my purvolume account. www.purevolume.com/aprilsfalling

here are the lyrics.

The Sky Is Too Long

The silky night sky
has a double-mind tonight.
It's upper torso lies exposed
Shining bright freckles upon my nose.
One eye looms like hopeful doom,
pointing out the unbridled groom.

Blow me over,
Please blow over.
There's nothing left but to...
Blow me over.

The flat black sky
has a double-mind tonight.
Lower legs cower behind
the anger of October nights.
Ruffles line the midnight dress
hiding jewels among the mess.

Blow me over,
Please blow over.
There's nothing left but to...
Blow me over.

Your eyes full of kindness,
I don't know if I can accept this gift.
My two natures keep fighting,
Pulling me into this rift.

Blow me over,
Please blow over.
There's nothing left but to...
Blow me over.

© Copyright 2005 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-01-18 11:55 PM


I listened to it....AWESOME!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

young_blood
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2 posted 2005-01-19 11:23 AM


thanks for listening to it.
Lexy
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3 posted 2005-01-19 05:35 PM


The guitar is really good and the words are obviously excellent, but the melody...seems to leave something to be desired
who am I to say, though.  
is it you who sings or someone else?

young_blood
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4 posted 2005-01-19 06:38 PM


i sing, and i agree that the melody is a bit boring. I usually have another guy sing and he comes up with more creative stuff. your judgement is great. thanks for listening.
Lexy
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5 posted 2005-01-19 07:34 PM


melody perhaps is the most difficult part of song writing.

young_blood
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6 posted 2005-01-19 07:49 PM


i would agree. i am pretty new to writing melody. i have played guitar for 6 years so thats nothing new to me. like i said, my other singer usually writed the melody and i sing improv. harmony. it works best that way.
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