Happy being your Friend - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2005-01-15 10:48 PM

Trapped behind frowing smiles,
Laughable fears haunt my mind,
I want to live my life to the fullest,
But I’m crippled by the fear I never left behind.

The silent noise taunts me
As I ponder the void of my heart,
I want to let my secret out,
But I wouldn’t even know where to start.

My smiles are invalidly used,
I thought I’d fool everyone.
Trouble is you don’t buy it,
You know me better than anyone.

Smoky dreams inhaled, now let go,
What I want I can no longer grasp.
It slips right through my fingers,
And back to darkness I relapse.

I’m never going to be like her,
You no longer will love me,
I tried to move on but I’m stuck,
Forever in love with you I’ll be.

I wish I could tell you all this,
But I’m sparing you all the pain,
I know you love her, and not me,
And then things would never be the same.

So I will keep my secret within,
Hope the current of pain will soon end,
And for now I will go on saying
That I’m happily just your friend.

-Erin
Let me know what you think, this was written just in a spur of the moment thing when tons of emotions rushed in but let me know anyways!

AIM-blueyed angel940
One day u'll ask which is more important,u or my life. I'll answer my life and u'll walk away never knowing u are my life.

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

1 posted 2005-01-15 10:55 PM

Smoky dreams inhaled, now let go,
What I want I can no longer grasp.
It slips right through my fingers,
And back to darkness I relapse.

wow...

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2005-01-16 12:04 PM

"My smiles are invalidly used,
I thought I’d fool everyone.
Trouble is you don’t buy it,
You know me better than anyone."

Omg...I can so relate to that stanza...AMAZING WRITE! This is going straight to my library (i think i have just about everything you wrote in there!

)

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2005-01-16 12:14 PM

Glad you liked my poem so much!  It was, all in all, rather hastily written...

"Trapped behind frowing smiles,
Laughable fears haunt my mind,
I want to live my life to the fullest,
But I’m crippled by the fear I never left behind."

Ahh, exactly the position I'm in.  Fear does have a way of holding one back.  I have to say, I can relate my life, such as it is at the moment, very well to this poem.  Emotional poems, especially one's concerning love and angst, are something you have much talent in, Erin.  Though as always, I'm sorry to see you're in a sittuation so relative to my own.  Moving on is often so hard to do...
                                 -Rich

"I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless"

Suede
Junior Member

since 2003-08-25

Posts 38
Drifting on the soul

4 posted 2005-01-16 09:19 AM

A sad poem which struck my heart. Young love is just hard, isn't it? A good write, a sad story. Bringing emotion to the blank canvas of poetry is always a good way of releasing, the unexplored depths become open with poetry! You did this so well, the expression. I enjoyed your words, i was sad for your pain. Keep writing! Peace and Love

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2005-01-16 10:41 PM

Wow. This is such an amazing piece of poetry. I love the descriptions in this. I think the 3rd stanza was my favorite.
Excellent job! Thanks for sharing.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

I_dont_know_me
Junior Member

since 2003-12-08

Posts 48
UK, Cymru

6 posted 2005-01-20 06:25 AM

wow i loved your poem and i find i can relate to alot of stuff you write

i especially liked these two stanzas

"My smiles are invalidly used,
I thought I’d fool everyone.
Trouble is you don’t buy it,
You know me better than anyone.

Smoky dreams inhaled, now let go,
What I want I can no longer grasp.
It slips right through my fingers,
And back to darkness I relapse."

well thanks for a great read..once again

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

7 posted 2005-01-21 12:36 PM

"I wish I could tell you all this,
But I’m sparing you all the pain,
I know you love her, and not me,
And then things would never be the same."

WOW!! I really liked this part. This poem was really sad......but i liked it alot

Jezzika

you know he really wants me

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.