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HopelessRomanticGuy
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0 posted 2005-01-12 12:41 PM


You are truly pathetic
Do you know that?
Living just for her
Just because she’s “phat”

Yet you say you know it’s love
But stop and think before you leap
“What do I know of love?”
before sew what you can’t reap

You’ve never had a girlfriend
And yet now, “she’s the one”
I can already see the end
And trust me it’s not fun

But no, I’m just jealous
I know that’s what you’ll say
Yes. Sure. I’m jealous
That’s why I walked away.

I tell you that I’ve been there,
And that it’ll only make you cry
But you think I’ve been no where
And that all I do is lie

So I think I’ll stop
Because there’s no helping you
You’ve already sewn your crop
So you must reap them too

Just remember this
When you wind up down and low
And all I have to say is this
“I told you so”

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Not my best, but I just needed to get that out.I suppose you'd call it a rant poem.Well, read and enjoy, or at least understand. Peace

"I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless"

© Copyright 2005 Richard H. Dikeman - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-01-12 10:37 AM



it's very good... I like a good rant...I know how this feels, and sometimes although you really want it to, saying 'I told you so' doesn't feel that great when someone else gets hurt.

WindSong
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2 posted 2005-01-12 12:40 PM


I liked it, but I've read other of ur work that i liked better...

talk to u later. peace!!!

"Stand still awhile and dream of the times when your heart felt full." ~Reina Nash~ R.I.P. 9*6*04  You'll always be remembered, I love you!

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3 posted 2005-01-12 07:29 PM


I like rant poems (I sure write alot of them ^_^)..just good to get your feelings out...lol.
Good write!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

aussie teen
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4 posted 2005-01-13 08:51 AM


this is good rich.... i like it and know how oyu feel and wat you mean... rant poems can be the best ones sometimes... i agree i have read better but this is still very good..
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

Savage Quiescence
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5 posted 2005-01-14 09:55 AM


I can relate, having been on the side of the one hearing the "I told you so."

This one is going to the library, good write.

tapper798
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6 posted 2005-01-15 10:24 PM


Very good Rich, I loved this, prolly cause it's something I wish I could say to my friend.  I'm in the exact position of this poem and that's why I love it cause you wrote it very well and I could relate to every line.  Great job!!!

Erin

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One day u'll ask which is more important,u or my life. I'll answer my life and u'll walk away never knowing u are my life.

WinterWren
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7 posted 2005-01-16 10:47 PM


Sewing what you reap, classic. I like the way you used it here. Ranting poems really help don't they? Just because this one is a rant it doesn't make it any less of a good poem.
As always, I love this.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

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