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AllThatGlitters4321
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since 2001-10-03
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0 posted 2004-12-30 09:03 AM


You promised me you'd stop by today
So here i am waiting on the porch
cold rain drops hit my face
The tears fill up making it hard for me to see
Third time this week a promise you broke to me
Why do i still have so much trust in you
After all i've been put through
You haven't proved a thing,
but i continue to give you a try
Maybe my heart's just not made of stone
Why don't you love me?
I never did anything but love you
I was only 5 when you left,
Tell me what were you trying to prove
You're suppose to be a man
Someone i need in my life
The more i try and chase you
The more you go and hide
I wish you'd come to see me
If only just one time
I remember the day you left
You promised you'd be back
and everything would be fine
13 years later i'm still waiting
For you to fix all these promises
that you keep breaking.

This poem isn't personally about me,
but i know there are many kids in this situation,
i just thought i'd write a little about it
hope you like it and please tell me what you think

© Copyright 2004 *MeGaN* - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
1 posted 2004-12-30 11:24 AM


Wow, this is such a strong poem. Im not in that situation myself, but Im sure you've captured how others might feel about it pretty well. Wow, Im just blown away.
Thanks for sharing.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-12-30 07:34 PM


I was reading the poem and felt like crying...it was that powerful.  Then I saw the bottom note and read that you are not personally going through this, which made me feel alittle better.  But like you said, there are so many kids going through this, and it's just depressing that so many people have to go through this situation.

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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