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~DreamChild~
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since 2001-04-23
Posts 544
in your dreams

0 posted 2004-12-21 06:53 PM


if you had
to go through life
trying to be
something
not yourself,

had you rather live
or die,

or would you just

fight...


Well I crank up this jam
to drown out these damn voices.
what purpose deserves these
perversions of choices,

anchoring me
securely to this flesh,
condemning the seed within me
to it's death?

How do these options'
corruption take root?
The meat of the tree
may be sweet, not the fruit.

This bitterness wilderness
of body and mind;
spirit and soul as a whole
are confined

to prisons of driven
and carnal desires.
The heart is so strong
but this body is tired.

Oh, when can i rest?
Tell me, when can i sleep?
Not tonight
I must fight,

and the blood will be deep...




~ the stuff dreams are made of ~
          

[This message has been edited by ~DreamChild~ (12-21-2004 08:38 PM).]

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muchos
Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102

1 posted 2004-12-22 12:24 PM


this is a very detailed piece of work you have here. at times i felt myself reading words that werent there..a good thing..im not sure. but i see the meaning behind your poem however it was more of a song to me, and it truly describes to many people in my life that i know, and i must say you did a great job at expressing yourself through words. isnt that always how it is though...live to die, or die to live. have a great christmas!
wvplayernotreally
Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215
yakima wa
2 posted 2004-12-23 03:58 PM


wow...thats all i can say. I had to read it outloud its that good!!!

I can't be your superman

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