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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2004-12-18 12:13 PM


Listless yearnings grabbed my heart,
Begging me to understand,
And yet my heart has always pulled back,
Running from the wrath of the hands.

I wanted to believe it would work,
You were my perfect dream,
But like reality is deceitful,
Things aren’t always what they seem.

Long conversations about nothing,
Were the most meaningful of all.
Knowing I could come to you,
When my world would start to fall.

You were my dream come true,
And that’s what hurt even more.
I saw you as the perfect one,
One that I indescribably adored.

Now I’m here, lost inside,
Trying to get myself to see,
You hurt me, I must move on,
You didn’t want to be with me.

I lie to myself when I say
I would leave you where you stand.
If given the second chance,
I’d do it all again.

Hurtful words, feelings lost inside,
How will I ever live through this?
I beg myself to understand
How you hurt me, yet it’s you I miss.
-Erin

If you guys could help me come up with a title and tell me what you think, I'd really appriciate it! (I'm horrible with titles!)


AIM-blueyed angel940
One day u'll ask which is more important,u or my life. I'll answer my life and u'll walk away never knowing u are my life.

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silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-12-18 10:59 PM


lost inside maybe? not sure... you said it twice so just a thought!

awesome poem though, you are great! i loved it actually. might read more from yours if i remember to come to teen poetry again. ha

-Laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

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