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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent 
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yes i know it isnt my best i have had a bit of writer's block so feel free to give suggestions Streams of chrimson, gold, and fushia across the sky Being held tightly between your magnetic like arms Heart pounding in fright Not scared of you, Terrified from not knowing what to do If i tell you how much I love you, will you still stay? or will you just run away? Soft skin pressing against my lips, Do you mean it when you give me this sweet kiss? Dazzled by your kiss But confused by all this, Please tell me what we are and who we will remain. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
seems like everyone in here is falling that's good though better than poems of lamentation thanks for the read you're doing good, i'd lengthen it a bit more though but you're on the right track |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Laura- Hi. I enjoyed the piece, and I suggest that the poem be titled either Magnetic or Dazzled! -Kellie |
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