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Take Me Back |
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AllThatGlitters4321 Junior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 45 |
Can you please take me back somehow, someway.. take me back those yesterdays when you once loved me, when i knew you really cared I don't know what ever happened sometimes life seems so unfair it all seemed to move so fast as quick as you walked into my life was as quick as you left no fair warning, no final goodbye i don't know how many more tears my eyes can cry I know i'm stronger than this but my heart has control please take me back, so i can have that feeling of security when i felt lost it was you that guided me your love showed me the way please take me back those yesterdays It's pretty short compared to my usual, i just couldn't figure out a better ending.. anyway please comment, and thanks for taking the time to read. "Don't gain the world and lose your soul, wisdom is better than silver or gold." |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Having recently gotten over feeling this way, I'm probably more than a little biased in opinion. Yet still, I have to say that, even if that we're not true, I would still have enjoyed this one. I'd offer help with the ending, but nothing groundbreaking comes to me either. Great job, regardless! I know what it's like to have someone be your security blanket. You just have to look at it this way: he showed you the path, but it's up to you to do the walking all on your own. Well, it worked for me. (x.^) -Rich Winamp Is Playing: "Magic Carpet Ride" Steppenwolf "I'm burning in the heavens, |
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