Words Can't Stray When Ears Don't Stay

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Teen Poetry #7

Words Can't Stray When Ears Don't Stay

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

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Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-12-06 04:59 PM

Words Can't Stray When Ears Don't Stay

the hours float by too quickly for us,
let's drown, my love, before we rust,
let's fill our lungs with sweeter wishes
than the world who only seeks seductive kisses.
Wish me well, love, for you are growing weary
while your voice falls unfortunatly short of hearing.
Hold my hand again and whisper this idea,
of life, love, and those things we feel.
Drift away...drift far away...
show me why you won't stay...

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

1 posted 2004-12-06 05:32 PM

Hold my hand again and whisper this idea,
of life, love, and those things we feel.
Drift away...drift far away...
show me why you won't stay...

i love the ending
-Laura

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-12-07 01:30 AM

thanks laura

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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3 posted 2004-12-07 04:06 PM

"the hours float by too quickly for us,
let's drown, my love, before we rust,
let's fill our lungs with sweeter wishes
than the world who only seeks seductive kisses."

Liked that part. Great write Alex!

~Alli~

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~DreamChild~
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since 2001-04-23

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in your dreams

4 posted 2004-12-08 06:33 PM

very melodic song chorus. passionate, and well written.

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2004-12-09 09:25 AM

thank you. i never really thought about using it for a song, but thats a great idea. thank you all who commented.

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