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tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

0 posted 2004-12-05 10:16 PM

My first mistake was letting you go

My thoughts for you I never did show

I never told you how I felt

And now it is too late my cards have been delt

I guess it was never meant to be

Now I just wish my slate would be washed clean

HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

1 posted 2004-12-05 11:07 PM

You know, I think I really do enjoy your poetry. This one is really grand! It reminds me of why I always go for the gold, despite the risks. Hesitation, as in my current sittuation, can always lead to regrets. And I've learned the hard way that it's better to be able to say, "I tried my best," than to have all those, "What if," thought cluttering up your head. Maybe you've just learned that lesson the same way I did. Always make a decision, even if it's wrong. If not, then you wind up like me!

-Rich

"I'm burning in the heavens,
and I'm drowning in a hell.
And my soul is in a coma
and none of my friends can tell,"
~Take Me~ Papa Roach

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

2 posted 2004-12-05 11:10 PM

rich
you really dont know how much your comments mean to me when i posted i was not confident about these poems at all thanks
laura

HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2004-12-06 12:53 PM

No problem at all. Although, you have every reason to be confident. True, your style isn't as mainstream (think sheep, and you'll see me poke fun at myself!) as that of my own, but it is VERY good in it's own right. Your work is touching and emotional; at least for me, it reaches deep down into my soul and tugz heart strings. I rather think I'm going to enjoy your being here, and I doubt I'm the only one. Keep on writing!

-Rich

"I'm burning in the heavens,
and I'm drowning in a hell.
And my soul is in a coma
and none of my friends can tell,"
~Take Me~ Papa Roach

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-12-06 07:21 PM

"My thoughts for you I never did show

I never told you how I felt

And now it is too late my cards have been delt"

The above part has happened to me, and you can never get the "what ifs" out of your mind..."what if i had said something...would everything be different?"
Awesome write, even though it's kinda sad.