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AllThatGlitters4321
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since 2001-10-03
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0 posted 2004-12-04 12:51 PM


I can't seem to figure out
When i look into your eyes
the love and happiness that was once there
is gone.

Your heart is now stone
black as the night
You seem out of touch
There is something not right

Why don't you open up to me
Tell me what the problem is
Please, its so hard to try and help
When i can't figure out what's wrong

Your heart is now stone
black as the night
You've seemed to lock it up
and hold the key so tight

What happened to us,
The relationship we knew
I've given you myself
What more can i do

I dont know why you won't open up
but i'll give you time alone
come back to me when you are ready
You can always call this home.


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red_angel*16
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since 2004-09-04
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1 posted 2004-12-04 04:45 AM


I can totally relate to this poem,
I was going out with this guy for a few months, and I thought he really liked me
but after a few more days he acted so differently, like he doesnt hold my hand, he doesnt call my house, and ya
so great write keep on posting!!!

always christine  

AllThatGlitters4321
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2 posted 2004-12-04 10:52 AM


Thanks

"Don't gain the world and lose your soul, wisdom is better than silver or gold."
-Bob Marley

tapper798
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3 posted 2004-12-04 01:04 PM


Good job! this is really good, it flowed really well!

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

*Alli4000*
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4 posted 2004-12-04 02:48 PM


Good write Megan! I liked the similie you used in the second stanza.
I can relate so much. Keep posting!

~Alli~

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WinterWren
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5 posted 2004-12-04 10:56 PM


Good poem, I liked the repition of 'your heart is now stone, black as night.'
Again good work,
thanks for sharing.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

Riley
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6 posted 2004-12-07 05:17 PM


it was good...but i am sad to say i can relate to this so much. :-\

thanks for the read..

ri

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
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7 posted 2004-12-07 07:02 PM


i almost didnt get through with out crying! i am also reminded of a past relationship with this poem thanks for sharing
HopelessRomanticGuy
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8 posted 2004-12-08 12:54 PM


Yeah, I can relate to this past and present.  A great and extremely relevant piece from you, as always!   I'm trying to prevent this from happening right now.  I know she likes me, and I damn well know I've feelings for her.  Yet I know she'd only break my heart.  Or worse, I break hers. Neither of us is ready for the other.  I hate putting people through the confusion and insecurity that you seem to be going through.  I never want to be, "that guy."  And that's why I'm loving your poetry.  That, and it IS REALLY good!     Just thought you'd like to know.


                            -Rich


Winamp Is Playing:
"Boulevard Of Broken Dreams"
Green Day
American Idiot

"I'm burning in the heavens,
and I'm drowning in a hell.
And my soul is in a coma
and none of my friends can tell,"
  ~Take Me~ Papa Roach

AllThatGlitters4321
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9 posted 2004-12-08 01:35 AM


Rich - thanks alot for your comments, I really appreciate it, also i hope everything works out for the better for you and the girl you are talking about..


everyone else, i'd also like to thank you for your responses!

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