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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
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New York

0 posted 2004-11-29 12:46 PM


Air heavy,
weighted down by her presence,
crushing my deflated lungs.

Crushing my soul,
my heart, and joy.
Stealing my freedom,
creating panic and fear.

The stones she throws are weak,
and the words so strong.
and pain is stabbing at me like a sword.

Hurt and abandoned,
likewise, and sorry.
I want it to end.
possibly an apology.

All I want it my air back,
so my lungs can inflate.
I want my soul, heart and joy to be free.

-Anyone who reads this know I am simply stating my feelings and this is not intended to hurt anyone however if it does and a moderator deems it necessary to pull, I do encourage it.  I don't want to fan any flames here I just want to express my emotions.

© Copyright 2004 Kellie M. Cantrell - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
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1 posted 2004-11-29 01:09 PM


quote:
The stones she throws are weak,
and the words so strong.
and pain is stabbing at me like a sword.



Hey Kellie,
          We poets of all people, it seems, are most affected by words.  I guess we're just open to verbal and literary communication, be it positive or otherwise.  And I know I can't speak for everyone, but self expression is what I believe PiP is all about.  You should feel free to express yourself here, and not have too fear flames.  You are most certainly an excellent poet and I believe everyone here will have the utmost respect for what you have to say - I KNOW I do, - be it light or bent toward the darker side of life.  Besides, as far as I can see, you've done nothing to offend.  I see naught but a beautiful poem, written by a girl with much spirit.

                                -Rich

Winamp Is Playing:
"Burn (Acoustic)"
Mad At Gravity
Mad At Gravity

"I'm burning in the heavens,
and I'm drowning in a hell.
And my soul is in a coma
and none of my friends can tell,"
  ~Take Me~ Papa Roach

Kellie_Cantrell
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2 posted 2004-11-29 01:14 PM


Thanks
~DreamChild~
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3 posted 2004-11-30 10:28 AM


you always write such powerful pieces.

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4 posted 2004-12-01 07:21 AM


girl i need lessons from you! hahahahaha the words and the style always so powerful. groove on sista!
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
"and we'll all float on ok....." - modest mouse
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5 posted 2004-12-01 06:29 PM


Enjoyed this one Kellie...emotional.
And no, there is no need to pull it.

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

~DreamChild~
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in your dreams
6 posted 2004-12-11 08:08 PM


a new look at this one in a more revealing light... this is an excellent work.

you can have your air back now.


Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
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New York
7 posted 2004-12-12 02:47 AM


Hey Dream... I have my air.. you didn't take it. This isn't about you.
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