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~DreamChild~
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in your dreams

0 posted 2004-11-16 05:53 PM



fresh grass
misty morning
cold dew
on naked toes

behind the sunbeams
the majestic rainbow
leprechauns
dance
in pots of gold

children echo
across creation
the lands listen
in silent awe

laugh now sweet child
the times are happy

one day
one life
everything tends to change

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punkrockerrobin
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1 posted 2004-11-16 08:44 PM


"one day
one life
everything tends to change"


i loved that last part great write.
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~DreamChild~
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in your dreams
2 posted 2004-11-19 02:35 AM


thx!
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3 posted 2004-11-19 04:39 PM


I liked the ending too.
Nice job!

Now when are we gonna take that vote...? lol. !!

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Kellie_Cantrell
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4 posted 2004-11-20 02:49 AM


hmm, interesting. I liked this.
Lexy
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California
5 posted 2004-11-24 04:34 PM


leprechauns
dance
in pots of gold

HAHA...ha.
probably wasn't supposed to strike me funny but it did. I just so got an image of that.
nice.

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6 posted 2004-12-11 03:26 AM


quote:
fresh grass
misty morning
cold dew
on naked toes


i'd walk outside barefooted, but it's a little bit cold outside now
short statements that paint big pictures
great read

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