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electricxheart
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far away from home.

0 posted 2004-11-15 04:14 PM



i.

we are so wrong. if i counted the ways…
well, she wouldn’t understand either.

it’s our hearts. they’re not as shallow as
everyone thinks.

ii.

she’s so focused on her eye make up. so
focused on her stick on nails.

well, only so much glue can make up for
her being perfect.

i hope she cracks when she least expects it.
where’s her free spirited soul?

iii.

our family can hide the imperfections.
but i see more than they expect.

iv.

the pictures tell everyone who your smile
once was.

you both were so happy.
i believe i’ll be like you someday.

v.

except i’ll tell the truth.

and when someone talks about romance,
i’ll say i’m in it till i die.

and i’ll smile like i did on the younger days
when things were so complicated, you didn’t
have to understand.

my kids will thank me for not wearing stick
on nails. my kids will always forgive their
daddy, for not yelling loud enough.

vi.

my future will be your reflection.

except much shiner.

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Kellie_Cantrell
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1 posted 2004-11-15 09:29 PM


I enjoyed

Smile

Allysa
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2 posted 2004-11-15 10:12 PM


i especially enjoyed the conclusion.
young_blood
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3 posted 2004-11-16 01:53 AM


it was pretty good. it should be shinier not shiner. just a note.
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4 posted 2004-11-16 11:49 AM


wow! very good in my book. it's going into my library. i loved the flow on this one. thanks for the read.
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5 posted 2004-11-16 07:49 PM


i love this! great job!

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