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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2004-11-14 09:03 PM


Hello everyone! I'm Javier, that one moderator that isn't around so much, but no worries, I am lurking every now and then

I thought i'd contribute to the massive amounts of poetry that has been going on here since...A LONG TIME AGO. I haven't really contributed any of my work for, say, 2 years now (i think)...so enjoy.
I wrote this one when I was a junior in highschool, I guess that makes this poem 5years old. But read and spit out those comments if you have them
Mistress of Rose Fields:


"Mistress of Rose Fields, beware thy speech.
Tis Whispering Meadows, a secret leach.
Crouch down and speak, yet lightly still
Thou dost not want a Meadow to thrill.

Ever so softly grant me thy tale.
Be slow, yet steady, my mind to fail.
In left ear, not right. Tell me now,
Whisper thy plight of where and how."

Time elapsed, the tavern was cold.
Mistress of Rose Fields, her secret told.
Whispering Meadow lay in shock on floor
Exclaiming, "Halt! Please stop, no more!"

Yet still, she went on, and on she pressed.
Meadow lay dead, in motionless blessed
With eyes wide open, and mouth closed tight.
His mind in fear, in fear of fright.

Tears ran down Mistress cheek.
Uttered a secret that made her weak.
Fell to the floor in a weary spill,
Yet continued on, no fear of kill.

She finished herself with one, short phrase.
Said it softly and within a haze,
"Tis what happens when we blindly see,
I turned my back on love, on thee."

"One good thing about music: when it hits you feel no pain"- Bob Marley
~I am Trance~

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earthdust
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1 posted 2004-11-14 10:31 PM


i like this dopey dope. glad your still posting. always enjoyed your work, from way back lol!

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

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2 posted 2004-11-15 01:49 AM


I never thought I'd see you in here again
Marshalzu
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3 posted 2004-11-15 08:24 AM


Nice to see you posting in here again Dopey
Allysa
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4 posted 2004-11-15 10:51 AM


Dopey AND Acies(r)! Oh my!

As always, Dopey, wonderful.

I've missed you guys.

Tamma
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5 posted 2004-11-15 05:13 PM


HeHe... Javi, Acies, and me... is it a miracle? LoL! Javi, Always loved your work, oh, and news... I now have a 13 1/2 month old son named Harvey.

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

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6 posted 2004-11-16 12:02 PM


it's the dopester who never answers me on msn! lol beautiful pome deary i loved it. it's almost as beautiful as you RAWR! hahaha
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt!
cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2004-11-16 12:29 PM


Funny- every single person who replied has probably already read this poem lol

i didnt know any of you guys were still around....especially acies, i thought he died along with me.

But yesh, I am here and there and everywhere. Occassionally glancing at what everyone is doing.....im still a Mod, aren't I?! lol

anywayz- if anyone would like to hit me up sometime, feel free.

But for now- i have to go to class.

Check you all later folks

"One good thing about music: when it hits you feel no pain"- Bob Marley
~I am Trance~

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8 posted 2006-02-03 08:08 PM


Hi Javier.  

I like it.

<3

"How inimitably graceful children are in general before they learn to dance!"
           --Samuel Taylor Coleridge

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9 posted 2006-02-04 02:47 AM


Wow, talk about a blast from the past

Thanks for the read Dopey, much enjoyed

and then He created the horse...

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10 posted 2006-03-13 01:12 PM


Talk about everyone crawling from the woodwork!

:P

Good read!

the_girl_next_door
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11 posted 2006-03-13 06:09 PM


Wow.. I'm just a member but Have to say that this is the first poem I've read of yours and it was wonderful.. I hope to hear more from you!


Keep it up!!!

~Heather

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12 posted 2006-03-13 06:09 PM


PS-like your picture...

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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