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Teen Poetry #7

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~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

0 posted 2004-11-13 12:16 PM

In the garden known as planet Earth,
sewn deep, there is a seed,
from which shoots forth a wicked vine
of selfishness and greed.

When the season's harvest comes
and the fields are ripe to reap
we'll gather forth our deadly fruit
and from this bounty eat.

Unless the garden of the world
be tilled and plowed afresh,
the only grain
that shall remain
is the poison seed of death.

Freedom is the dream of sleeping reality.
~DreamChild~

I_dont_know_me
Junior Member

since 2003-12-08

Posts 48
UK, Cymru

1 posted 2004-11-13 05:01 AM

i liked....

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2004-11-13 03:58 PM

this was amazing...i loved it. I esp. loved the ending...and i like your critique message...lol Keep it up.

kissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

3 posted 2004-11-13 06:05 PM

Loved the last stanza....actually, i loved the whole poem...lol. Great wrtite! Keep posting Derrick!

~Alli~

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earthdust
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 53
predestined and foreknown

4 posted 2004-11-14 03:55 PM

cool. thx.

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

5 posted 2004-11-16 12:57 PM

woohoo go you i loved this poem. keep on sharin.
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt!
"and we'll all float on ok....." - modest mouse

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