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I STILL NEED A TITLE!
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I STILL NEED A TITLE! |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131
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Holding out and hanging on for all of the wrong reasons, It seems that nothing can replace that comfort, nothing I can believe in, Why am I holding on, what do I have to lose? We fight, I cry, I prove myself, what do I have to prove? Your wrong and you know it placing all the blame on me, All my questions go unanswered, your lying, why can't I see? Change the subject, pretend I'm not there, Look past me again, pretend you don't care I'm there but I don't exist, I'm only your shadow and I won't be missed, Seeing right through me, like you always do It's like you'll never feel what I felt through you, I'm gone and you don't even notice Or is it that you don't even care, I'm lonely and I hoped you would know this Or at least pretend to be there, Every night I lie awake wondering if its worth it, I cry myself to sleep praying to forget, Where are you now, why can't you hear me, Your here but somehow, my face you can't see We're drifting away, we're falling apart, In my head you'll stay, always breaking my heart, I love you, I'm hurt, I'm lonely, I'm confused, I find myself asking if I've only been used, Can you love something so much when it isn't even there? Can you feel and still believe Can you call this love cause it's not fair I shouldnt wan't to have to leave, Will you miss me when I'm gone, Or will it all just be the same, Will you find where you belong, Where will you place the blame, Nothing is what you gave me, Nothing left for you to take, Gave you all I had, only adding to the mistake, I won't say a word, You can't hear me anyways, Keep your eyes closed,You wouldn't see me if I stayed, Just remember someone loved you once you forget my face, It won't take you too long, cause I was never there to be erased, A silent reminder of you, will stay with me everyday, Your a part of me I won't forget, even though you threw me away |
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earthdust Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 53predestined and foreknown |
how about something relative like " fading away" or "fade" u know to express your seperation, or insignificance. or perhaps use a catchy line from the poem as its title.... like "wont say a word" but remember, a poem does not have to have a title! sometimes a title can minimize the feeling and meaning of the poem (my opinion only) good luck! " Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. " TY! |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
THANKS! Maybe I'll leave it without a title? Hmmm... I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"I'm there but I don't exist, I'm only your shadow and I won't be missed, Seeing right through me, like you always do It's like you'll never feel what I felt through you" Amazing write...loved that part! (^^^)  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
i like the person above said about using something from within the poem...If I were you, I'd use "Silent Reminder" i think that's an intense name...but that's my humble opinion |
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