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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2004-11-06 05:54 PM

When I move I bruise immediately.
Patches of blue and purple.
In this white chair where they sit you, your hands bleed as they hang by your sides.
They laugh while the numbers black my eyes.

Damn you and your royal blue coat, soft and thick. You've been wearing it everyday for the past week.
Where you showcase your tears, and use them to paint water color images.
Self portraits mostly.
Hide the antidote in your inside pocket.
The cure is in a green tablet, the substance of which you sucked from her eyes.
Which blink yellow now. And hands which bleed and shake.

We are not well.

I put on my coat and walk in the rain.
Through your water colored landscape.
But when it comes down it, I can barely breathe anymore.

Damn you and your twisting smile, which pulls always from the right corner before it proceeds.
If you were to scream to the sky would it change the fact that the light is blinding.
and my eyes are watering, every color drips from their corners.
But when I really think about it, I can feel it, and I'm barely breathing.

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

1 posted 2004-11-07 08:54 PM

oh my gosh. this drips with imagery,
i absolutely love it. especially
the ending paragraph. how amazing.

-kelly

i could be an accident, but i'm still trying.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2004-11-10 04:25 PM

The imagery in all your work is wonderful, I always love the way you paint your pictures.
Very good piece, I love the feeling I get when I read it. I especially loved the last stanza!
Thanks for sharing.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

LegalSecret69
Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 69
Virginia

3 posted 2004-11-10 07:11 PM

This was excellent...I could see so much in this

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2004-11-10 07:42 PM

i agree with everyone. the imagery was refreshing.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2004-11-10 09:05 PM

awesome write lexy! your poems blow me away....

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

earthdust
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 53
predestined and foreknown

6 posted 2004-11-12 12:46 PM

wow this is very creative! im sure i cant understand it as the masterpiece it is, but it was a captivating read.

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

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