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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2004-11-01 10:02 PM



i swear it was the chains that held me down, not
the fact that you left me alone on the coldness
of these crisscrossed shaped regrets.

it was so automatic, (the smile, your laugh).
slipping in between my fingertips, please play
my mix tape for me again.

stuck on rewind and backwards and in between,
i tried to dance throughout the heart break, smile
on top of smile like this was never my well
kept secret.

dirty hands mock me on the right side of the
mirror, sunshine streaming in around my blood
shot scars.

come visit me sometime when the hurt seeps
out onto the floor so you can see who i am when
the poison isn’t sleeping in my heart.

i’ll close my eyes while you count the rips, the
pounding of my heart will add to the excitement
of shedding this skin.

it was so automatic, (the smile, your laugh).
slipping in between my fingertips, please play
my mix tape for me again.

so automatic how no one really knows, suffocation
can be so beautiful when you don’t have a soul
to bring you to the surface.

so let me drown and please close your eyes so i
don’t affect you with my own acid tears.

i could be an accident, but i'm still trying.

© Copyright 2004 Kelly Landis - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
1 posted 2004-11-01 10:13 PM


As dark as this was, it connected with my darkened soul very well.  Not an easy read, but much dark poetry isn't.  Liked this alot.  All the raw emotion and dispair seeping out from between the lines... toxic and intoxicating.  

                                 -Rich


Winamp is Playing:
"Closer (Trance Remix)"
NIN



Part of knowing where I'm going
is knowing where I've been
~Rich~

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
2 posted 2004-11-02 08:56 PM


Great job! Every word just flowed together perfectly. This is one for the library! ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

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3 posted 2004-11-28 04:55 PM


I'm sorry I missed this too.  Amazing write like always...

~Alli~

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Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
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Wandering
4 posted 2004-11-28 10:45 PM


*Thumbs up* Library!
Savage Quiescence
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Wandering
5 posted 2004-11-28 10:45 PM



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