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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE 
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I miss you But I know you don’t care I cry at night Just wishing you were there With me But you’re gone Your voice no longer lingers No longer feel your fingers Caressing my face You’re gone And all I can do now Is go away too I wish that I could take all that I did Away I know that I hurt you in so many ways I’m so sorry But you’re gone Your voice no longer lingers No longer feel your fingers Caressing my face You’re gone And all I can do now Is go away too With my heart in two I go away…too…* When I wrote this, I wrote it like a song...it seems that's the only way I can write anymore... There is not ONE person in this world that you cannot live without. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great writing BabieDoll, I think that when I was reading it, I was thinking song... even before I read what you said at the end. Thanks for sharing.  Andrew |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"I miss you But I know you don’t care I cry at night Just wishing you were there With me" Liked that part.. I also thought it was a song before I got to the part where you said so. Nice write...good to see you posting again.  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
I really like this poem especially the part "I miss you But I know you dont care I'd cry at night just wishing you were there with me" I cant wait to read more of your work thanks for sharing |
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AtLsHawTy17 Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60IL, |
i like it, i thought of it as a song too but it is a good song good job Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me |
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