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Teen Poetry #7

Isolations

Christioned
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since 2004-01-15

Posts 93
Huddling in the dark

0 posted 2004-10-26 08:57 PM

Alone in this room
so dark and so cold
trying to find a door
to somewhere new
everydoor leads to yet another room
with only one way out
that leads to an endless cycle
of rooms and doors
that are black and cold
I will only ask the darkness one thing
that if I am to stay here
than at least let me be able to find peace here.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2004-10-28 06:43 PM

Great writing, you've expressed wonderfully the feeling of loneliness, being trapped and the feeling of desolation in so few word. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Andrew

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-10-28 10:36 PM

"I will only ask the darkness one thing
that if I am to stay here
than at least let me be able to find peace here."

Such emotion in this poem...I especially liked the ending.
Keep Posting Andi!

~Alli~

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