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electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2004-10-22 03:26 PM

my face was cut out of the picture. i’m not sure if this
was everyone’s intention or the side of the picture which
held my (s m i l i n g?) face just happened to have slipped
off of the edge. i laughed along with everyone else, but
when the smile’s a pretend, pretty fake smile then i guess
it’s not really a smile to begin with.

and i tried breathing today without much satisfaction. it all
ended up in my heart hurting and then he passed by me and
it caused my heart to skip a beat which caused me in the act
of passing out right there in the rush of the crowd.

i’m starting to very much dislike the word love. and whether
or not it can be defined, is beyond my everything entirely. all
it ever gave me was the sound of my heart breaking. and it
showed me just what exactly my tears tasted like.

my dreams were never beautiful because everyone has decided
to step on them on their way out the door. that’s when i decided
to hang them up on my ceiling like little twirling stars. and i
remind myself that the girl in the mirror is not who everyone
believes she is.

but it’s not so bad. each day i become more accustomed to the
idea of smiling a real smile and cutting pretend out of my picture
instead of me.

falling and falling away; out of sight, until all we have left is a
hint of truth and the true definition of love.

i could be an accident, but i'm still trying.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-10-22 10:21 PM

You are very talented and I am impressed with your writing.
I like this line among others:
"and i tried breathing today without much satisfaction"
I like the whole theme and moralof this piece.
Very well done.
*applause*

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

2 posted 2004-10-23 10:06 PM

your style of writing amazes me. I have to say I really enjoy your writing.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

3 posted 2004-10-23 11:42 PM

" i remind myself that the girl in the mirror is not who everyone believes she is."

Liked that...you writing is so refreshing and beautiful.

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

4 posted 2004-10-25 05:22 PM

w0w, This was wonderful!!!! **** I loved this and the way that you wrote it. You put your feelings into this and I read it 3 times just so that I could memorize it.

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

5 posted 2004-10-25 06:50 PM

"falling and falling away; out of sight, until all we have left is a
hint of truth and the true definition of love."

I loved it!

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

6 posted 2004-10-26 10:38 PM

Good job! VERY GOOD JOB! This is one for the library! ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

StarryEyed3
Member

since 2005-06-26

Posts 58
bostonia

7 posted 2005-07-26 04:54 PM

wow. your way with words never ceases to blow me away. i love it.

"and i'll sit and wonder of every love that could have been
if i'd only thought of something charming to say..."
-death cab

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

8 posted 2005-07-28 08:38 PM

Woah...I always love your work, but this has to be one of my favorites.
My favorite lines were, "all it ever gave me was the sound of my heart breaking. and it showed me just what exactly my tears tasted like." I can relate to that so well it's unbelievable.
Thanks for sharing, this is going in my libary.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

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