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Why can't a girl love me?

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Sweetpoet16m4u04
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0 posted 10-13-2004 08:26 PM       View Profile for Sweetpoet16m4u04   Email Sweetpoet16m4u04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sweetpoet16m4u04


Tonight I lay looking for answers from above
Should I really give up on looking for love?
The tears begin to fall down my cheeks
There is a special girl out there that my heart seeks.

I donít know what to do sometimes
As my heart pours out all these sad rhymes.
Is love really worth all this pain
There is no sun in my skies all I see is rain.

She was  never able to give me a glimmer of hope
So my heart was hung out on a rope.
My love was for her and only her.
And for once in my life I felt like a complete failure

I have always been able to move on in my life
But what makes it difficult is it her I want for a wife.
Should I just give up now knowing she will never feel the same
Or let my heart continue to feel like its burning in hells flame
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*Alli4000*
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1 posted 10-13-2004 10:50 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Don't worry, one day she'll open up her eyes and see how great you are. Until then - you gots me! (you know what i mean chris...hehe) *rolls eyes*.
This is definatly going in my library.

~Alli~

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kissa~rachelle
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2 posted 10-13-2004 10:52 PM       View Profile for kissa~rachelle   Email kissa~rachelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kissa~rachelle

Amazing write...

I am sorry for your pain, and i know how you feel. Love hurts....but it also heals...its sort of like a checks and balance system...in a weird way...

This was great, but in some parts the rhyming sounded really forced...you should try and do a freestyle...

I'l be looking.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

Sweetpoet16m4u04
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3 posted 10-14-2004 10:52 AM       View Profile for Sweetpoet16m4u04   Email Sweetpoet16m4u04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sweetpoet16m4u04

Yeah Kissa,
Thanks for the input because your right the forced rhyming really hurt the flow of it but truth was i was hurt and just needed to get it down!! Thanks again!!
I_dont_know_me
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4 posted 10-14-2004 01:14 PM       View Profile for I_dont_know_me   Email I_dont_know_me   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for I_dont_know_me

great poem!
aussie teen
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5 posted 10-15-2004 07:27 AM       View Profile for aussie teen   Email aussie teen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aussie teen

this is beautiful.... i know love hurts but its all about balance.... everything in life is.... when she does realise that you have been standing right in front of her she will be amazed....
keep the writing coming
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

tearsoflove13762
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Texas.. and yes i have an acce


6 posted 10-17-2004 05:03 PM       View Profile for tearsoflove13762   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tearsoflove13762

its ok sweet heart!me and alli love you!!!
red_angel*16
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7 posted 10-19-2004 06:13 AM       View Profile for red_angel*16   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for red_angel*16

sweetpoet dont give up
some day you'll find that special girl
until then just keep on looking
for her.
sweetie_cute_2004
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8 posted 10-19-2004 09:20 AM       View Profile for sweetie_cute_2004   Email sweetie_cute_2004   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for sweetie_cute_2004

hey
welll umm, i dont think you know me but i do ,lol.i heard about you from one of my friends anyways, this poem was great ,i really enjoyed it ,,dont worry you will find that girl . Just remember ,No matter what happends you will always have us {ALL} .... I PROMISE U THAT!!   you have a long way to go so dont worry about anything but yourself !.

earthdust
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9 posted 11-12-2004 12:12 AM       View Profile for earthdust   Email earthdust   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for earthdust

if you really love her, u always will...
and vice versa. dont give up, time has a way of healing wounds.

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

Shaddow1
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10 posted 09-08-2006 01:19 AM       View Profile for Shaddow1   Email Shaddow1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shaddow1

You know I ask my self that very same question abot my ex. He says he love me yet we are not one. I feel Ishould give up. But I don't and niether should u

Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller

Tempest
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11 posted 09-11-2006 04:58 PM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tempest

I personally think you need to suck it up...come on...
cherrys_rule
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12 posted 09-14-2006 02:52 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

Man If you liked me I would definitly be with you. If this girl doesn't care what you feel then maybe you shouldn't be with her at all. But you did an awsome poem here. You should shove it in her face. Just joking. Be nice to her. Great right though. Hope to see more from you lata.
                    Courtney
secret_truth_lies
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13 posted 11-23-2006 11:05 AM       View Profile for secret_truth_lies   Email secret_truth_lies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for secret_truth_lies

I donít know what to do sometimes
As my heart pours out all these sad rhymes.
Is love really worth all this pain
There is no sun in my skies all I see is rain.


I really like this poem. I really liked this part too. I hope to see more from you very soon.
infralie
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14 posted 04-24-2007 02:57 PM       View Profile for infralie   Email infralie   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for infralie

hey babe wow what is the story on this poem even tho it states it clearly tell me more well adios for now
jessi
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15 posted 04-22-2008 08:40 PM       View Profile for jessi   Email jessi   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for jessi

this is the 2nd poem of yours ive read. i really like it. cuz i guess i sorta feel the same way....only im a girl, so just reversed. but still...
Bob K
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16 posted 04-23-2008 05:32 AM       View Profile for Bob K   Email Bob K   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bob K



Dear Sweetpoet16m4u04,

                      Your heart is right there in the open.  I'm an old married guy and happy with it and I think your poetry's right on track, looking for a voice and a way of speaking.  You might consider that while you want to marry and settle down, a lot of the girls your age are more interested in  looking around and seeing what the world's about.  They may be looking for company while they're scouting things out and seeing what's what, but the idea of getting married or settling down as a teen might be a little bit to fast for them.

     Why not see what happens if you just look for women who you like to spend time with and like to do the same sort of things you do.  Spend time with them, both of you enjoy what happens and see what develops in a much slower fashion, so nobody gets panicked.  It takes a while before people really get to know each other.  Not always, but a lot of the time.  Try that out and see what happens as an experiment.  If it doesn't work, trash it and try something else.
Bahigano
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17 posted 05-14-2008 11:56 AM       View Profile for Bahigano   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bahigano

Hey don't sweat it. i'm sure she'll come around. i mean i would love for a guy to love me but i just gotta sit and wait for him to come. Love takes time. hopefully you find her.
always
Lea
 
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