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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
memories are the things that kill me. and the pictures poke out of their cardboard boxes, each one of his smiles reminding me that i will never be the same again. maybe it’s the way he watches me because we all know i’m fraying at the edges. (prevent me from breaking, love). and it runs over my hands, and i know he deserves a whole heart. i wish i could be all you imagined. he sings me to sleep some nights, his pretty guitar chords and my head continues to spin and somehow in these arms of his brown eyes, it’s just okay. we could create our own world and run away from the rolling eyes and misconceptions of people who don’t clearly see through these flaws in between us. i don’t mind the loneliness, i just want to be in reach again of something stable and you’re the closet i’ve ever been to believing in the four letter word on everyone’s rushed tongues. and i can’t understand but i can still feel your hands wrapped tightly around my waist, leaving their burning impression of what we could be. i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I like this. though there are some cliche parts. the lines that ring with originality make up for it. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
This is my favorite that I have read from you so far. I just love it, it has a powerful affect on me. I tried to pick a favorite verse but I love them all. This one especially, "we could create our own world and run away from the rolling eyes and misconceptions of people who don’t clearly see through these flaws in between us." Excellent work! This is going in my library. WinterWren- |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
it struck me, especially these lines: i don’t mind the loneliness, i just want to be in reach again of something stable and you’re the closet i’ve ever been to believing in the four letter word on everyone’s rushed tongues. your msg is 'say it like you mean it' so indeed, i will. you have a way of summing things up so creatively, it's insane. "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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I_dont_know_me Junior Member
since 2003-12-08
Posts 48UK, Cymru |
wow! this mind corny but your poem was amazing i truly mean it i dont know if anyone else agrees but it made me feel all warm an stuff! ok im getting carried away anyway great poem. ~Emma~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"he sings me to sleep some nights, his pretty guitar chords and my head continues to spin and somehow in these arms of his brown eyes, it’s just okay." Awesome poem...I really enjoyed reading, and the above part I liked alot. Thanks for sharing, and keep posting!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
VERY good work! I should be working on a project in school right now but I was side tracked and this is the first poem I clicked on. I'm glad I did! I even printed this! Thank you for the read! ~Jess  "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
aww, thanks you guys. your replies are appreciated.  -kelly i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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