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Strider612
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0 posted 2004-10-07 11:07 PM



Your face was hard and cool tonight
As we sat there in the soft moonlight.
I tried to open up your heart
And took your hand in mine.
But the air around us held a frost
That spoke of all the love we’ve lost.
I’ve heard you every signal now;
This love has lost its shine.

Your cold heart chilled my soul tonight,
So I’ll leave it behind.
I hope that somehow there’s a way
For love to ease your mind.
I honestly wish your heart well
But I have to move along.
You’ve given me the melody;
Now here’s the break-up song.

My choice might seem too hasty here,
But you don’t want to have me near.
I’ll end it all before I end up
Hurt worse than before.
It’s over now; I know that much.
I hate to leave behind your touch,
But it’s better for the both of us;
We’re looking for much more.

I wish I could be sorry,
But I know I have to go.
Once I thought we had a chance,
But it was never so.
I won’t hold this against you;
I’ll forgive you for each wrong.
Just listen to my melody;
This is the break-up song.

By now the tears are in your eyes,
But I’m not there to hear your cries.
Will you even miss my love
Somewhere on down the road?
You burdened me with every care;
Now it’s too late and I’m out there.
My heart is finally breaking free
And casting off that load.

Don’t try to chase me down again;
It will not help a thing.
I’ll speak my mind more freely,
And my voice is going to ring.
We were never meant to be,
So I’ll just say, “So long.”
I finally found a melody;
Now hear the break-up song.

© Copyright 2004 Levi Pressnell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-10-08 12:12 PM


this is really beautiful
i love the way you have written this and it flows realy nicely.
keep up the writing
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

SEA
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2 posted 2004-10-08 09:57 AM


you know this is really really really awesome.
layla
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3 posted 2004-10-08 10:56 AM


it is awesome,
you put so much emotion in it
I am impressed

electricxheart
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4 posted 2004-10-08 04:55 PM


wow, this is amazing.

i hope you keep writing.

--kelly

i could be an accident, but i'm still trying.

kissa~rachelle
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5 posted 2004-10-08 05:17 PM


Now this is the (moderator's edit)  right here...I loved this soo much, it was awesome. I loved it.

Karissa


I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

[This message has been edited by SEA (10-08-2004 07:13 PM).]

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6 posted 2004-10-08 05:41 PM


Whoah..I'm speechless here...this poem was amazing!!
Wow...you have got some talent for writing poetry.  Keep Posting!

~Alli~

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