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Teen Poetry #7

untitled (but emotion often is)

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-10-06 09:53 PM

Untitled (but emotion often is)

The tiniest cuts bleed the same ,
The smallest leaves the same color of stain,
Don't they both roll with such beauty and grace?
The most sorrowful dancers with
The most sorrowful answers.

Satin covers only so many imperfections,
Lies lift the truth higher to you,
Don't both ignore the action underneath?
Quiet pleas with the dirtiest ideas,
Quiet please, just forget my needs.

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-10-06 10:28 PM

I loved it hun. It was great.

The last two lines were amazing, i really liked it. It was short, but not too short. It leaves me waiting to hear more though.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-10-07 10:48 AM

thanks a lot karissa

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

3 posted 2004-10-22 01:29 PM

you bear a soul, beyond your years...

love&light, on your Road...
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-10-22 10:30 PM

wow.
I love how blunt it is.
so much is coveyed in such short setencing.
that's hard to do. you did it well.

Allysa

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since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

5 posted 2004-10-23 09:56 PM

Alex.. Alex alex alex.

You rock hard core.

Thats all I can really say.

Soo brainded right now.

Awesome!

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

6 posted 2004-10-23 11:20 PM

nice poem... really deep

heavy stuff dude.

keep them coming.

love and empathy
darkness.
Sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

7 posted 2004-10-25 06:19 PM

thank you all for your kind remarks. i'm glad that i can entertain.

~DreamChild~
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

8 posted 2004-11-13 09:07 PM

another good one i really enjoy.
good work

~Express Yourself~

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

9 posted 2004-11-13 11:16 PM

thank you

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