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Teen Poetry #7

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tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

0 posted 2004-09-23 10:08 PM

As tears of love anoint my face
I think about your sweet embrace.

I think of the day we first met,
The ground outside so soft and wet.

I remember the good times and forget the bad,
The best and worst times I've ever had.

One thing that makes it all worse,
Is that you were my first.

As i wipe thes tears of love off my face,
I remember your warm embrace.

I think of when you squeezed too tight,
and when we got in that huge fight.

I rememer you telling me that you cheated,
and that she was the one you really needed.

One thing that keeps running through my mind,
Is that a guy like you isn't worth my time.

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

1 posted 2004-09-24 02:04 PM

great write! I liked it alot!!! As for the title, I have a hard time name my poems, but maybe like My First, My Heartbreak or something a long those lines mb? Well, good job anyways!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-09-24 04:42 PM

I agree with Serena, in that I like the title 'My First' for this poem.
I haven't exactly been through this, but I can just imagine how much it hurt.

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-09-28 04:49 PM

wow...i am sorry this happened, but it seems like you can handle it, better than i could atleast.

I hope things get better, and you can forget soon...that was my problem, i couldnt forget.

Anyways. Awesome Poem.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

4 posted 2004-10-02 03:03 PM

I like My First, it fits. I loved it, awesome job, keep it up!

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

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