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thinktwice
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since 2003-12-23
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0 posted 2004-09-21 01:51 AM



So pointless it is
All the metaphores adrift
The meanings fall in lines
I see the finish in my mind

So pointless it is
to despair at expense
When another gives solace
By the same feelings expressed

So pointless in is
to repair what's been fixed
Their words move in circles
they all break a stitch

So pointless it is
to write your own story
All the one sided embraces
break free to destroy

So pointless it is...
So pointless it is...


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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
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1 posted 2004-09-21 09:37 PM


this sort of sounds like it could be a song.
this part was my favorite:
"So pointless it is
to write your own story
All the one sided embraces
break free to destroy"

You are one talented writer.



*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-09-21 11:03 PM


The flow was great...and your poem, it made me think twice.
Like Lexy said, you have got talent! I really cannot wait to read more of your work!

~Alli~

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