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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
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My own world

0 posted 2004-09-19 10:09 PM



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You may thing I forgot,

That you meant nothing to me,

But you have no idea how much

It still kills me to see.



You may think I’ve moved on,

That you were that easy to forget,

But trust me when I say,

That hasn’t happened yet.



The things you would assure me of,

I look for others to say,

I may not realize it most of the time,

But I look for signs of you everyday.



I look for you in those I see,

Hoping maybe you’ll appear,

And when I see a small sign,

Your presence to me is near.



I have not forgetten you at all,

I can barely get you off my mind,

I keep searching for you in other places,

Knowing what I’ll find.



Nothing ever comes up,

Cause you are you, the one and only,

And now that I’m without you,

My world is so lost and lonely.



If I were without you completely…

I don’t know how I’d live,

Knowing that even now you make me smile,

From just the presence you give.



Knowing that even now

I still cry myself to sleep,

Knowing that you’re no longer mine,

A hurt that is just too deep.



All in all, I miss you now more than ever,

It’s a longing that never goes away,

I miss you now, I’ll miss you later,

I’ll miss you forever, I’ll miss you everyday.

-Erin

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
dodge_chick2003
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since 2004-01-18
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1 posted 2004-09-20 12:12 PM


I really like this poem but I think it ended to quickly, the end kind of threw off the hole poem. Keep trying

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-09-20 01:07 AM


Wow Erin, another good poem from you! My favorite lines in this one were:

"I look for you in those I see,
Hoping maybe you’ll appear,
And when I see a small sign,
Your presence to me is near."


Like all your other poems, I could relate to this. Strange, huh?

I am going to have to disagree with dodge_chick though, I think that the poem is fine the way it is, but if you choose to take her sugestion and add on to it, go ahead.

Overall, another great read from you. Keep 'em coming!

~Alli~

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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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3 posted 2004-09-21 08:18 PM


This is how I feel exactly. You got the feeling across just right. I especially loved these lines, "I keep searching for you in other places,knowing what I’ll find." And,
"Knowing that even now
I still cry myself to sleep"
Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

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