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aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
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Australia

0 posted 2004-09-18 08:57 AM



i have come to realise
that im not over you
and i wish that you were
here with me
so i can slap,
scream, rant and rave
at you for
making me feel
like such a fool

you said that you love me
but if you truly did
you wouldnt have left
just because of
a little bit of distance

it made me want to try harder
but it made you give up

why did you hurt me?
why did you leave?
why couldnt you try harder?

i told you so many times
i dont care how often
we get to see each other
i dont care if you
have a car or not
i can catch a bus
i can scam a lift

when life gets difficult
i stand up and fight my way through
but you have just
given up and laid down
letting life walk all over you

now we are over
my heart you stil hold
and i want it back
so i can start to feel alive
i need my heart back
either you come back too
or send it home by itself
because my love
i need to start moving on
with or without you by my side

*this is about my ex boyfriend and its a bit of a vent but i needed it... its my only escape because i can no longer cry over things going bad in my life.*
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

© Copyright 2004 Ruth - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-10-06 12:28 PM


Go ahead and rant sweetie, thats what we're here for after all, to listen...good emotions shown in this piece, I liked it for the honesty it portrayed.
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

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2 posted 2004-10-06 09:21 PM


"I wish that you were
here with me
so i can slap,
scream, rant and rave
at you for
making me feel
like such a fool"


My favorite part is the part above.  Like Bela said, you rant all you want...sometimes it's just good to get your feelings out.

I'm mad at myself for missing this when you first posted it. Better late than never...

Anyway, nice work...thanks for sharing!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
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3 posted 2004-10-07 05:51 AM


thankyou both so much for your replies. even if they are late... :P

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

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