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AtLsHawTy17
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0 posted 2004-09-16 02:04 PM


Tears shed on an already soaking wet pillow
Sorrow held in, so pain you cannot see
But my smiles only hide, what my eyes cannot
and Im scared to let you know I miss you so much

Dreams crushed on an already shattered star
Wishes shut out, so wonder you cannot
But my heart holds what my hands cannot
and Im afraid to tell you I need you

Memories faded into te dark night
Pictures turned to dust
My mind is still hoping for it to be alright
But my life has lost the trust

Faith lost in an already broken soul
Hope killed, so there is nothing left
But my tears shed what my heart cannot
and I need you more and more each drop

Hearts broken when already broken once
The heartaches will never be stopped
But sometimes I wish so bad, I pled
That you could just make the pain stop

Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me

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PoeTik JusTice
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1 posted 2004-09-16 03:04 PM


I really, really liked this poem. I   could definitely relate, and it flowed very well. Wow, good job!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

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2 posted 2004-09-17 11:36 PM


"Tears shed on an already soaking wet pillow"

I liked that opening line alot...I also liked this part as well..

"I'm scared to let you know I miss you so much"

I can really relate to this poem, and am very surprised that it has only gotten 1 reply besides me.

Keep Posting, ok?

~Alli~

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