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BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
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0 posted 2004-09-15 08:44 AM


Of all the people I've lost
before,
You are the one I will miss
the most.

At one point in time, I
admired you.
Now I see it was only a
charade.
You pretended to be something
you weren't.
All of my respect for you is
gone.
I thought you were
unique.
better.
You are just the same.
You've proven me wrong.
Thanks.

Now I have the chance
to better myself.
The chance not to care
anymore.
You've given me the freedom
to move on.
You are nothing to me
anymore.

How I perceived you before
doesn't change
who you have become.*

There is not ONE person in this world that you cannot live without.

© Copyright 2004 J.Lynn - All Rights Reserved
TheGirlNoOneKnew
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since 2003-12-04
Posts 92
PA, USA
1 posted 2004-09-15 02:08 PM


I liked this. Some parts were a bit rough, some commas could have been used instead of periods but still, I liked it. I think all of us have had false impressions of people, and it's always sad to realize who they really are.
*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-09-15 07:01 PM


I can really relate to this poem, not knowing who someone really really is and then...bam...you see who they really are.
Nice job! I'm gonna add it to my library.  

~Alli~

Also, just wondering...are you taking title suggestions?


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BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
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3 posted 2004-09-15 10:09 PM


Suggest away if you wish...

~J.Lynn

There is not ONE person in this world that you cannot live without.

dodge_chick2003
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since 2004-01-18
Posts 136
California
4 posted 2004-09-15 11:26 PM


I say you should call it ummmm..... Change. Well thats what I would call it. Good job I can relate to this.

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