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Within Temptation, Within Redemption
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Within Temptation, Within Redemption |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
Under the insignificance Feelings sleep in secret harbors Grasping intelligence Teething for more sorrows Within temptation lay sirens in flames Since their inception my heart remains ablaze Beyond recompence pasts lay war ridden Upon deliverence regrets stay hidden Above the insignificance Feelings sleep in shallow harbors Lasting intelligence Grieving for more sorrows Within redemption lay sirens ashamed Since their inception my heart remains the same Beyond recompence pasts stay hidden Upon consequence regrets lay ridden [This message has been edited by thinktwice (09-12-2004 08:14 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Cool! This is well done, except for that extra "g". I liked this.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
thanks...i read it over but didn't catch the typo. |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Very nice |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Great work, I like this piece a lot. It flowed well and I like your choice of words. This one is going in my library. ~Jess  "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I liked this poem as well. But I also can't the mistake...maybe because I'm so tired from school my eyes aren't working...lol.  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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