A night in the car (driving into hearts unknown)

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Teen Poetry #7

A night in the car (driving into hearts unknown)

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-09-11 11:23 PM

Hazy street lights
oversized structures made of
day old brick and a little elbow grease
highlight and interrupt
the overcast skyline.
cling and cluter
crowd the backseat
and grime lies
in a blanket across the dash
silence and a motor
sing together in offset harmony
while tires plot a course
through and to wherever
the gasoline will go
travelling backroads, main
and roads created this night
speakers ring out
as a melancholoy heart
sings words of pity
and of hope for himself
corners and curbs come to disapper
as lights streak across the windshield.
A love lorn soul
travels only to forget
all and everything
of love's obsession
and never ending turmoil

(just a poem i wrote in my spare time. Comments would be appreciated.)

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-09-15 04:37 PM

I like this.
Driving reveals much.
Well put.
This inspired me.

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

2 posted 2004-09-16 03:09 PM

I loved this poem, you have a lot of talent. Using a car in it was great!
DaRe 2 DrEaM

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

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