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red_angel*16
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since 2004-09-04
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0 posted 2004-09-11 05:47 AM



I never thought it would end like this
our last good bye and our last kiss
i will really miss you
its just hard to belive
that our love is no longer true
you were really the best
you were every thing to me
and cant you see that I still love you ?
now here I am left all alone
our whole relationship just thrown away
you said  you no longer loved me
But thats okay
Some day you'll regret this
then you'll come back for one last kiss...

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dodge_chick2003
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since 2004-01-18
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1 posted 2004-09-11 06:37 PM


I cant believe nobody has replyed to this, I know how you feel. This was awesome. Good job
*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-09-11 07:08 PM


Well...the flow was off in a couple places, and the rhyming was a little off too, but other than that, I think that this is a great poem!
Keep Posting!

~Alli~


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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
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3 posted 2004-09-17 08:12 AM


who cares about rhyming when something like this is coming from the heart..... this is beautiful... i love it.... i cant believe you havent got more replies for this.. its amazing
keep up your writing....
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

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