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...A Desperate Attempt To Forget...
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...A Desperate Attempt To Forget... |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131
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...A Desperate Attempt To Forget... Emptiness fills this place, my heart still beats for you The tears still fall down to me thats nothing new bitterness fills my heart silent hate, just look away no value in what I've found no more begging you to stay I won't forget what its like to breathe you in Your taste still lingers on my lips, I can still see me in your eyes I feel your face on my fingertips I remember every word you said I remember every lie I'll never forget the promises I won't forget how you didn't try, I know what made you fall away I know why you were scared, Do you think I'd be the mistake, Do you think I never cared Somewhere lost inside my thoughts, Your there when I close my eyes, You haunt my eager dreams A love now only to be despised, I'm giving up on everything Giving up on you Letting go of memories Forgetting what we knew I took your pictures down I threw the notes away Erased the desperate thought That you'd ever want me to stay, Take my heart out of my throat I'll hide it deep down, so you can never see Your speechless so I'll whisper goodbye All you ever left me with was your sorry... I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I really liek this. I can relate to it very well... Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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AtLsHawTy17 Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60IL, |
i love it, wow it was so good.... wow that just sent chills through me good work Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
wow, this is so amazing. I love it! I'm gonna keep it if you don't mind. You really used some talent here, I could relate so well. Awesome job. Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Omg...like tapper said, you have got alot of talent!!  I'm just sitting here speechless re-reading it again...and I'm just amazed...this is such an amazing poem. I'm going to add it in my library if you dont mind.  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Good work, very good. ~Jess  "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
Thanks for reading...I'm glad you liked it  )I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Wow. The emotions in this were so strong. I really liked the lines, "I'll never forget the promises I won't forget how you didn't try." and "All you ever left me with was your sorry..." Great work!! WinterWren- |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
I'll never forget the promises I won't forget how you didn't try, awesome lines, this almost reads like a song...some lines do seem familiar from popular ones, and i remember one person who just randomly posted mudvayne lyrics as their own...so at first i was worried, but then i could tell it was yours. it's really awesome, thanks for sharing. going in my lib. "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
hehe nope its all me...I would never take anything from a song...Someone posted a song by my fav band and they arent really popular yet so I'm sure that person didn't know that anyone knew them, but I did, I wrote to them and said something, they never wrote back or anything... But I don't believe in taking other peoples work )Thanks for reading!!! I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Going into the library. |
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