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red_angel*16
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0 posted 2004-09-04 07:54 AM


inside

why cant anyone see the
feeling that i have inside
it hurts when they tease
they just cant feel the feeling
that i have inside
they look
they cause trouble
they do things that they must
if only i had my way...

please write me a comment or wat i
should have done



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1 posted 2004-09-04 09:11 AM


Welcome to Passions.  Your poem was great... and I know how you feel...

I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (Please check your e-mail for a special greeting)

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2 posted 2004-09-04 06:21 PM


welcome and as far as what you should have done? Do you mean as far as your poem? Nothing hon, just write your heart...
red_angel*16
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3 posted 2004-09-05 06:26 AM


thanks for your reply's
on my poem. i wrote this
poem because i was teased alot
when i was a bit younger.

Christine  

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4 posted 2004-09-05 01:03 PM


Very well done and written straight from your heart.
Welcome to Passions!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

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5 posted 2004-09-06 01:56 PM


I liked this, and as far as what you should have done? nothing, poetry is about writing what you feel and becoming better at showing what you feel and that's what you did. Awesome Job and welcome to the forum!

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

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