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TheGirlNoOneKnew
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since 2003-12-04
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0 posted 2004-08-13 08:48 PM


Distance seperating, loneliness calling
as I lay my head down to sleep,
the phone isn't ringing, where are you?
and are you somewhere thinking of me?
Precious time passes us by,
we spend each day doing anything normal
to take our minds off of this one fact,
that we no longer are close enough to touch.
My heart aches, my body yearns
just to have you hold me one last time,
for the night is too long without you
and my bedside feels so cold.
I close my eyes, let the tears slide
as I grasp your picture in my hands,
god I hate this, I hate you not being here
please come back to me soon.

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fearing-laughter
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1 posted 2004-08-13 11:09 PM


hey,
sucky situation, but i really like the piece. it flows really nicely and is descriptive plus it says how you feel. awesome.

bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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2 posted 2004-08-13 11:30 PM


oh my gosh....you read my mind....i loved it...awesome awesome work!


ri

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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3 posted 2004-08-28 09:28 PM


"The phone isn't ringing, where are you?"

That line I can soo relate to. sigh

Anyways...great poem...keep writing!!!

~Alli~


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WindSong
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4 posted 2004-08-28 11:32 PM


First of all, this is  crazy...I just went through all these emotions and continue to do so everyday. I spent my vacation with my boyfriend in New Jersey and had to come home, and now...what you wrote is what goes through my head everyday.

I know it all to well...I really enjoyed it. Nice job...

"They say that truth will set you free, but then so will a lie. It all depends if you're trying to get to the promised land or just trying to get by."

kissa~rachelle
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5 posted 2004-09-02 10:36 PM




This one brought tears to my eyes. I am going through the same thing. Recently, me and him got into a fight, and so we havent been talking very much, and then i got grounded, and he is moving by the end of this week, and i just, i know it will never be the same...and i cry almost every night, because i miss him holding me, and i miss how we used to be, even if we were just freinds, i coud live with it, as long as he could still be within reach...like you said...

This one really hit close to home for me...

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

I_dont_know_me
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6 posted 2004-09-03 04:40 PM


wow! this really hit home thanks for a great read ~Emma~

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