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Teen Poetry #7

Fleeting Essences of Now

SCREAMIN
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 51
US, Tx

0 posted 2004-08-09 01:59 AM

so, so far away
causing pain from a distance
wreaking havoc on innocence
poisoning juice
in a four year old's cup
half empty, or half full?

churning gasoline
in a urn outside my door
consuming flames
spread over the floor

so, so long ago
maybe last week, maybe last year
it's all the same i'm sure
angels weeping o'er the grave
keeping candel vigil
swallowing the toxin
of a lying death

regurgitating immorality
in the face of those who killed
opposing sexuality
her baby's body chilled

so, so tired
it never even mattered
no one cared at all
they stomp on individuality
lying to the mirror
saying the same words
as enemies
killing ourselves for innocence
running our lives
from within empty shells

the tiny window's picture's spinning
the baby's sleeping he wont wake up
the tiny window's picture's spinning
the baby's sleeping he'll never wake up

cry now, dear child,
because tomorrow,
the tears wont mean as much.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-08-09 05:23 PM

oh, wow...

I cant beleive no one has replied to this...

I loved it, the ending especially.

Very amazing write..

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2004-08-09 05:35 PM

woah...your a lot better than most of the people who post here.
"her baby's body chilled"
I found this entire poem...chilling.
excellent writing.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2004-08-09 09:06 PM

well done, i enjoyed the way in which this was written. good use of metaphors and symbollism. good work.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-08-28 04:04 PM

Wow...I agree with everyone...this is an amazing write!

But I'm wodnering, how come only four people have replied to it so far?!?

Anyways, keep writing and posting here! I can't wait to raed more!!

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

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